Thread: my web site

Hey

LOOK!!!

I just had a photo shoot!!! and re did my web site!!!

There are probably some things wrong here and there so if you see something let me know.......Please check it out and tell me your thoughts

www.annwyndance.com

Mmm, nice pics. Nice costumes, too!

I'm not much use as a proofreader right now, my brain's exploding from other things. But I did notice one thing -- I can't tell where you are. There isn't a city or a country listed. I'd like to see that info on the home page, right away, and on the "services" page. You mention a kebab house, but most cities have one of those!

If it were me, I'd rename the services page 'booking' or 'book a show' or 'performances' -- I don't know why, but 'services' sounds kinda suggestive to me for some reason, next to a BDer pic. Maybe because we talk about 'full-service dancers" sometimes?

I really like the colors and the photos very much.

I really liked the colors - green text on the black throughout the site, (very simple, it looks great) and I liked the flowers.
I also agree with using "booking" or "performances" instead of "services". You are listing your services, but it may sound a little suggestive.
On one page it says you are in Japan - again, agree with Lauren, it would be better if you put it on the main page as well.

Very nice photographs, your web-page is looking more and more professional! Nice use of Bellas.

Have a friend/person you trust check through for capitalization issues and common mistakes/typos like "preform/perform" ...you wrote it so you won't able to catch such things, you need a second eye. Check for "I" as well because 95% of the web page you use the third person and the occasional first person seems odd.

More maps! Where are your lessons? (Some people will want to know where prior to contacting you for more info) same with the location of the restaurant you perform in.

At a glance of the service page:

"Annwyn offers a variety of Family Friendly
Dance styles Including Turkish Oriental,
Turkish Rom, Cabaret, and Tribal Fusion.
Props include Veil, Double Veil, Zills, and
Isis Wings.
See Annwyn Preform Sunday nights
at the Istanbul Kebab House Show
starts at 8:00"

At a glance I would remove many capitalizations and change preform to perform like:

Annwyn offers a variety of family-friendly dance styles including Turkish Oriental, Turkish Rom (commonly known as Gypsy) Cabaret, and Tribal fusion. Her props include veil, double veil, zills (finger cymbals) and isis wings.

Come see Annwyn perform every Sunday at the Istanbul Kabab House at 8:00.

(if there is a map or web page for the Kebob house I would link to it so that people can easily access a map/make reservations/figure out if it is in their area. I searched a little bit and found this http://japanupdate.com/restaurants/e...ore_kebab.html)

I think it would be enough to say that you accept payment in yen or dollars but not to mention current exchange rates. The yen and the usd don't fluctuate wildly. It might be easier to just set a yen rate and dollar rate. I'm paid in yen and if I paid something slightly different each month for lessons I'd be annoyed. I'd also put the bit about asking for prices and yen/dollars at the end of your list of services with the stuff about discounts etc. performances offered first, then the nitty gritty.

the site looks very nice. it has a clean design, a consistent theme and is very easy to navigate.

lovely gallery pics and wow! what a wardrobe!

a couple of nit picky web design points you may or may not care about:
i did a multi browser/multi os quick check. [not windows with ie browser b/c i assumed that is what most people use]
on the mac and linux os, most of the pages require a scroll to the right to view the whole page on a 17" monitor when viewed with firefox, safari, etc. if your web designer set the page width a little smaller, this would be solved. [you may have to scale down the images slightly] i don't know if this can be set with yahoo sitebuilder and their templates, never used it . also, you didn't give some of your pages a title [e.g. http://www.annwyndance.com/index.html page title = page title, not "annwyndance" or "home" or something to that effect [sorry, i poked around in your code :) ]

using the firefox browser on the mac os:
your pic in the pretty green costume on the "services" page covers the "S" in "services" in the middle of the page.

like i said, you may not care about this stuff...

i agree with the comment of renaming "services" to something else. you look so lovely and sweet in your pics. you don't want some pervy idiot taking the word the wrong way and inadvertently insulting you.

i really like the inclusion of recipes. a nice touch and smart to include some useful information to keep your site bookmarked.

overall i think it is very good. you may not care at all about the picky technical stuff. i hope the site brings you lots of business from good clients.

Just a few things I noticed right away. Like Lauren I noticed the lack of location, where are your classes?? If it's a private location where people must contact you to know, you should write *Please contact for class locatgion or something like that. You teach both Turkish and Egyptian style in the sam class?? Or are you teaching a technique that fuses both??

Regarding "Services", I agree it should be renamed. You also might want to list your perfomances on their own page.

Hehehe... I recognize some of those costumes. Where's Star?? She should see how good you look in them!!..g.:

I'm really lovin' the "Recipes" page - nice touch! :)

I love the orchids and the colors (orchids are my favorite flower). Just skimming through the "Annwyn" page I noticed some grammatical errors. You might want to have someone comb through it carefully.

I really like the layout too. The colors and flowers are lovely. Other than the gramatical and punction errors that have already been mentioned, I think you should also post pictures of your Turkish costumes since this is something you offer. You should show pictures of something you have done in the past or if you don't have any pictures available have a friend take pics. of you dancing in a Turkish costume to post as an example.
Overall it looks nice Annwyn.

I think at least half the costumes in her gallery are turkish -- Bellas and either Sims/Topkapis/Legends/Martas (I can't always tell the difference).

Or does she offer Turkish costumes for sale, too? Maybe I missed something.

Nope they are all turkish except the brown and 1 blue those are Hannan, The rest are Marta and Bella.....Though You do have a good point, I need to get a Tribal fusion one on there.....As for the technical and grammical errors, Ill run through it page by page hopefully today or tomorrow!!! Thanks guys

I wasn't clear. I meant Turkish Rom (Gypsy). It should be shown too. Maybe I just over looked it. Going back now to see.

ahhh YES!!! good point, infact in getting a brand new costume for that!!! ill put it up as soon as i get it!!!

Ohhhh, that makes sense. I want to see it!

Originally Posted by aazura

Hehehe... I recognize some of those costumes. Where's Star?? She should see how good you look in them!!..g.:

My babies! *sniff* So nice to see them being worn by such a lovely lady!