Thread: My website in english - did i translate right???

So after showing my website a few Bhuzzers commented on that it would be good if the site was in english and i agreed. Im not really that good with english but with help from google and a student its now up and running.

Pls pls pls look at it and tell me if some things looks strange. Some things were hard to name. Like the bachelorette extra "oriental cofee break" (see descibtion in the site) - is that really a good name?

Pls feel free to be picky and give me all ur thoughts on the site and text!!!..g.:

Selinas biografi & dansbakgrund. Läs om hur hon förälskade sig i den orientaliska musiken och dansen och genom danskurser, dansresor och uppträdande utvecklades till en professionell magdansös och dansinstruktör.

I didn't read everything but it looks good, the translations are great..g.:. Love the pictures in your gallery and will be checking back for the video page!
I liked the "hen party" description. I didn't see the "oriental cofee break" but I would consider changing this wording Finally, the group enjoys a snack with sweet oriental Turkish pastries, nuts, fruits, tea and coffee, to something like Finally, your guests will relax and enjoy a decadent array of oriental treats, served with coffee and tea as I present a final, secret gift to the bride.

The only thing that jumped out at me was the title "Exclusive belly dance show". Some pervs could take that to mean "she dances exclusively for me... " You might change it to "full dance show" or "distinctive event/production" etc. Also, I think you mean stage instead of scene in that description, unless you're talking about scenery.

Beautiful website and photos!!

Suggested minor alteration for opening page:

from:
As a wind from the Orient covered in sequins, stones and beautiful fabrics she enchants her audience with her dance. Selina Sevil is a professional performer with great passion for her art. Let Selina spice up your event with a spectacular oriental dance show.

To

Selina Sevil is a professional performer with great passion for her art. Like a wind from the Orient she dances, embellished with sequins, stones, and luxurious fabrics, and enchants her audience. Let Selina spice up your next event with a spectacular Oriental Dance show.

Yes, agree with Ozmas comments. Your original wording "Wind from the Orient" could be taken to mean that you have digestive issues ;-) But Ozmas new version reflects the meaning I think you intended.

Selina, I hope you don't mind but I did a quick re-write of your bio page to make it flow a little better for native English speakers. I live in Japan, so I know what it's like to have to write things in another language and how helpful rewrites from Japanese friends are.

It's not perfect, I haven't had coffee yet:

Since childhood, Selina has loved Oriental dance. As social gatherings, with family and friends, she would watch the women dance. She grew fascinated by the soft movements and the sharp rhythms. At home she played Oriental song again and again while she danced before her mirror, hoping one day she'd master the dance.

As a teenager, Selina started taking lessons in oriental dance. She studied many different styles and with a variety of instructors, but it was only when she met Turkish dancer Suzan Ayvaz that she felt she'd found what she was looking for. Suzan Ayvan became a source of great inspiration to Selina and help her interest bloom into a full-grown passion.

Time passed and Selina moved to Malmo where she began taking courses at The Oriental Dance Center to increase her understanding of Arabic dance styles. Soon after this Salina, who had been teaching at other schools, taught at The Oriental Dance Center and performed as a lead dancer in the center's troupe show "The Passion of Orient."

The time that followed was full of intense training, dance classes and dance trips to Turkey. For years, Selina has spent most of her summers as a resident in different parts of Turkey. On her travels, she's visited Turkish dancers, has taken lesson, and has immersed herself in the Turkish style. During one of these trips to Marmaris , Selina was discovered by a famous Turkish choreographer and was invited to appear on stage at The Turban Palace, Marmaris' largest 5-star hotel.
Selina was hired as a principal dancer at The Turban Palace. Every evening she entertained the upwards of 600 guests at the huge amphitheater. Her shows became so popular that she eventually, with the help of a private chauffeur, worked in the three largest 5-star hotels in Marmaris; Turban Palace, Marmaris Palace and Marti. Each hotel had its own amphitheater with a sound and lighting team, choreographers and ballet and folk dance groups from different countries. Working daily with a variety of stage professionals, these jobs gave Selina the opportunity to further develop her stage skills and emerge a very professional dancer.

Selina returned to Sweden and started working full-time in dance. She held classes at Studieförbundet Vuxenskolan, Orientaliskt danscenter, Forum, Lady Fitness Center och Salsa Sabros. On weekends, she performed regularly at the restaurants Edelweiss, Bodoni, Pasha, Sultan Palace och Ankara in Sweden and restaurant Alanya and Ankara in Denmark. But even teaching at least ten courses and dancing twelve shows a week, she felt that something was missing.

Selina wanted to increase people's awareness, appreciation, and understanding of Turkish dance styles. That's why she, together with the dancer Soraya, founded the Turkish dance association Dansöz. Today, this association has over 300 members and through Dansöz, Selina has had the chance to reach out to more people through the dance. She has held classes at the City Hall of Malmö, Malmö Hospital, Lund University, Turkish associations and few dozen basic and secondary schools in Malmö. Through Dansöz, she has also arranged several dance trips to Turkey where students from Scandinavia have met and deepened their knowledge and skills in both bellydance and folk dance. She has arranged lectures, shows and other activities, performed at numerous events and worked voluntarily with the dance to support children, the disabled and a wider culture.

Today, dance is Selina's life. She has participated in oriental dance festivals abroad and several music videos shown on TV in the U.S. and Afghanistan. In 2009 she focused on learning the Turkish folk dances, Turkish Romany and explored ballet, jazz and modern dance and its influence on oriental dance. She is booked for Arabic belly festivals in England and Germany where she will both perform and teach. She works constantly with new projects. One of the projects she is most proud of is her work with SOS Children in Turkey, a charity for which, through dance, she raises money for orphans.

aaaaaaaaaaand, unable to sleep in...I did the same for your booking page:

Bellygrams
Bellygrams are a pleasant surprise to present someone with. They can be performed at work, home, restaurants, or similar places and serve to celebrate someone's birthday, to make a marriage proposal, to send a gift or to bring good news. They consist of a surprise 5-minute costumed performance which ends by presenting a written greeting or gift from the booker. To facilitate the surpise, Selina will bring her own battery-powered sound system to provide the music.

A Bellygram serves a specific purpose and is different than a show meant to entertain a whole party. For party entertainment for an audience see the options listed below. Bellygrams, like all of Selina's performances, are appropriate for all ages.


Mini bellydance show;


A 10-minute show ideal for smaller events or places with limited space. It is family-friendly entertainment, perfect for private parties hosted at home or in small venues. In her show, Selina presents a variety of different rhythms options.

Classic bellydance show
A 20-minute show for standard-sized events in a venue with a dance floor or stage. The show begins with a mysterious entrance wherein Selina appears, her body and costume wrapped in a beautiful veil. When she has raised the audience's curiosity she continues the show with a veil dance. After this she performs an upbeat dance with happy music (here you can get the opportunity to choose between Turkish, Persian or Arabic music if you desire). The show ends with a powerful percussive drum solo finale.



Exclusive bellydance show:

An exclusive bellydance show is 2 * 20 minutes and suitable for larger events, such as weddings, galas or corporate meetings with an oriental theme to be held in a venue with a dance floor or a stage. Selina entertains the audience with two different shows on two separate times during the evening. The shows include a beautiful veil dance , dancing with the mysterious isis wings, dancing in high tempo to oriental drums and acrobatic floorwork. At each show Selina wears a unique professional bellydance costume.

Hen party / Bachelorette party:

Let Selina brighten your day with a beautiful dance and goodies from Turkey. The bride is brought blindfolded into a beautiful ballet room in central Malmö. She is seated with the rest of her group. When the blindfold is taken off she is met by soft lighting, colored spotlights, and oriental music. Selina enters dancing in full costume and performs a 10 minute long bellydance show with a variety of tempos and rhythms. After the show, the bride is dressed in a handmade bellydance costume, covered with stones and sequins with matching jewelry. This is a perfect opportunity to take memorable pictures. After the photo session, the entire group participates in a 60-minute dance lesson where Selina goes through various stages - from soft sensual movements to powerful shimmies and vibrations. Finally, the group enjoys a snack of sweet oriental Turkish pastries, nuts, fruits, tea and coffee, and the bride receives a secret gift. Hen parties can be booked as described above and can be modified as needed.


Hi ladies! Im sitting in the airport in stockholm after taking workshops with Aziza (canada). Just signed in here to pass some time and I saw all of the posts. Thats so nice of u all, especially ozma! Wow thanks really as soon as i get home i will jump on the laptop and start changing the text!

Thanks again, this is so sweet!!!
xxx

Wow Ozma I think these parts u translated are better in english then in swedish now haha!!!

Thanks again! Ive put it all online andI changed the start page and the "Exclusive" to Deluxe.

Do u guys have any comments on this page or maybe something to add?

Selinas biografi & dansbakgrund. Läs om hur hon förälskade sig i den orientaliska musiken och dansen och genom danskurser, dansresor och uppträdande utvecklades till en professionell magdansös och dansinstruktör.

All you need to do now is to remove "This website is under construction..." from your start page ..g.:

MEISSOUN

Originally Posted by dansoz

Do u guys have any comments on this page or maybe something to add?

Selinas biografi & dansbakgrund. Läs om hur hon förälskade sig i den orientaliska musiken och dansen och genom danskurser, dansresor och uppträdande utvecklades till en professionell magdansös och dansinstruktör.

I'm bored with nothing to do at work!

Payment is done on site prior to the performance or lesson.

Selina does not perform for all-male audiences. If there is an appropriate reason for doing so, please clarify it before attempting to book her.

Selina brings her music on CD. She can bring her music on a USB memory stick, but this must be arranged ahead of time.

If you need Selina to bring her own CD player, please request this in the booking form.

Selina needs a room where she can change before the show and in which she can safely keep her belongings during the show.

For shows in a small room or apartment, please try to clear an ample amount of space for her to perform in. It’s always better to give more space than less!

Selina is always happy to dance with the bride, the birthday boy/girl, or others, if requested ahead of time.

If you are interested in also booking an oriental musician / singer, Selina can provide the contact information to do so.

Selina accepts tips given to her in a respectful manner. Respectful tipping includes the traditional Middle Eastern “money shower” (where bills are showered over the dancer as she performs) or tips carefully tucked into her arm band, into her belt at the hip, or the shoulder of her bra strap. To avoid accidental dancer/audience collisions, make sure Selina sees you are going to tip her before you do so.

Disrespectful or inappropriate behavior towards the dancer will not be tolerated and will terminate the performance.

Cancellation must be done at least 24 hours ahead of the scheduled performance to avoid being charged half the performance fee.

I added the "To avoid accidental dancer/audience collisions, make sure Selina sees you are going to tip her before you do so." because I hate it when people come up behind me or reach out to tip too quickly...

Thanks again Ozma! I really liked the changes ur an angel!!!

Thanks again for all the help Ozma, Ive rewritten my bio a bit and I was wondering if u have anymore sleepless nights u want to fill with some translation?

pretty pls

Originally Posted by dansoz

Thanks again for all the help Ozma, Ive rewritten my bio a bit and I was wondering if u have anymore sleepless nights u want to fill with some translation?

pretty pls

I'll have a slow day at work tomorrow!

Bio:

Original: At home she played Oriental song again and again while she danced before her mirror, hoping one day she'd master the dance.

Change: At home she played Oriental songs again and again while she danced before her mirror, hoping one day to master the dance.

Original: On her travels, she's visited Turkish dancers, has taken lesson, and has immersed herself in the Turkish style.

Change: On her travels she's visited Turkish dancers, taken lessons, and generally immersed herself in the Turkish style.

Original: few dozen basic and secondary schools
Change: many primary and secondary schools

Original: In 2009 she focused on learning the Turkish folk dances, Turkish Romany and explored ballet, jazz and modern dance and its influence on oriental dance.

Change: In 2009 she intensified her study of Turkish folk dances and Turkish Romany dance. She also explored ballet, jazz and modern dance and how these dances have influenced oriental dance.

Thanks dear, I forgot to say the new bio is only in swedish so far. Here it is in english. With the google translator so its very "strange". Dont laugh at me its google

Dance Background
Selina fell in love with the oriental dance as a child. From eight to ten years of age lived Selina longer periods with a family from Palestine. An evening at home in the family's house was dancing one of the oldest sisters to an Arabic song and Selina became as enchanted by the dance and music. She was fascinated by the gentle movements and the rapid rhythms. She trained at home in front of the mirror and wished that she would one day master the dance.
As a teenager flourished interest further. There was a time full of intense training, dance classes and dance trips to Turkey. Selina spent several years most of the summer living in different parts of Turkey. On her travels she visited Turkish dancers and dancers, and took lessons in order to immerse themselves in this style step and history.

There are now more than ten years ago, Selina's first course in belly dancing and Selina interest in dance has grown into a passion. She also took lessons in Romani Havasi (Turkish zigenardans) and various Turkish folk dances as Halay, Karadeniz and Kaftasdans and persisik dance.

A selection of the teachers Selina took lessons from Europe and the Middle East: Fifi Abdou (Egypt), Liza Laziza (Egypt, Iran), Khaled Mahmoud (Egypt), Nour (Egypt / Russia), Dalila of Cairo (Egypt / Spain), Yasmina of Cairo (Egypt), Ahmed Fekry (Egypt / Germany), Sadie (USA), Leyla Jouvana (Germany), Josephine Wise (England), Shahrazad (Iran, Germany), Aziza (Canada), Ogun (Turkey), ZENN Diva (Turkey), Özlem Ildilsu (Turkey), Ozgen (Turkey), Umut Oryantal (Turkey) and Asli Kaynak (Turkey).

Selina - The Artist
Selina has worked as a principal dancer of the three largest 5-star hotels in Marmaris, Turban Palace, Marmaris Palace and Marti. She ran to their shows with a private chauffeur and they were held in huge amphitheaters with seats for 600 people. Each scene had its own sound / light team, was awarded by the choreographers and dancers in international ballet and folk dance. The work gave her the opportunity to develop their dance on stage with the help and training of people who daily worked with professional stage performance.

She has also been employed as a principal dancer at the restaurants; Pasha, Edelweiss, Bodoni, Sultan Palace and Ankara in Sweden and Alanya, Ankara and Istanbul in Denmark. She has performed as lead dancer in the group show "Passion of Orient" and leads the group show Turkish Delights.

Second part:

As a solo dancer, she has appeared on magdansfestivaler abroad and participated in several music videos shown on television in the United States and Afghanistan as well as numerous other events such as weddings, engagement parties, company parties, fairs, festivals, oriental night clubs, christenings, private parties, bayramfester, New Year's celebrations, inaugurations and galas.

Her dance style is based on the Turkish kabarestilen with its high technology, floor work, theaters by specific gestures and arm movements. This mixing her with elegance from the Egyptian style and features of Persian dance, ballet, dance, Iraqi, Lebanese dance and folk dance. She is a professional artist who spent a lot of work to continually develop and bring together creative shows. When she appears she has only exclusive clothing designed by the biggest fashion houses in Egypt and Turkey as Bella, Sim moda, Hoda Zaki and Madame abla.

Selina the Teacher
Selina has taught regularly at Lady Fitness Center, Study Vuxenskolan, Malmö Hospital, Oriental Dance Center, Forum, Dansöz, Ataturk and Salsa Sabrosa.

Selina students describe her as inspirational happy and humble. Her goal with the lessons is that each student should be able to take part of the dance and get a chance to create their own style while they'll like and get a better understanding of the oriental dance and its history. Her education consists largely of dance technique, expression, stage presence, tips and tricks, dance history and much laughter.

Selina wanted to work more actively to disseminate and immerse themselves in the Turkish style dance. That is why she founded with dancer Soraya 2007 the Turkish dansföreningen Dansöz. The association currently has over 300 members and by Dansöz Selina has had a chance to reach more people with dance.

By Dansöz she has held workshops at city hall, hospitals, universities, associations and dozens of schools in Malmö. She holds an annual dance trips tiill Turkey where students from the North met and deepened in both belly dance and folk dance and dance, custom travel to Turkey for business.
She has worked to support nonprofit organizations that protect children, the disabled and mångkulturalitet as the Red Cross and BRIS, by teaching volunteers at events around Sweden. This has been highlighted on television and newspapers. She has also started a charity project in which she dances by collecting money for orphans in Turkey.

I'll do it sometime tomorrow.

Dance Background
Selina fell in love with Oriental dance at an early age. Between the ages of eight and ten she lived for long periods with a family from Palestine. In the evenings she'd watch as the older sisters danced to Arabic songs. Selina was enchanted by the dance and the music, fascinated by the gentle movements and the rapid rhythms. She trained at home in front of her mirror, wishing to one day master the dance.

As a teenager her interest grew stronger. In the summers she traveled to different areas of Turkey for intensive dance training. On her travels she met many Turkish dancers and studied from them, but she also traveled to immerse herself in the culture and to better understand the history Turkish styles come from. As she grew older she branched out, taking lessons in Romani Havasi (Turkish zigenardans), various Turkish folk dances ( such as Halay, Karadeniz and Kaftasdans) and persisik dance.

More than a decade has passed since her first course in belly dancing. Selina's interest in dance has only grown more passionate and diverse.

Some of the teachers who have been influential on Selina as a dancer include: Fifi Abdou (Egypt), Liza Laziza (Egypt, Iran), Khaled Mahmoud (Egypt), Nour (Egypt / Russia), Dalila of Cairo (Egypt / Spain), Yasmina of Cairo (Egypt), Ahmed Fekry (Egypt / Germany), Sadie (USA), Leyla Jouvana (Germany), Josephine Wise (England), Shahrazad (Iran, Germany), Aziza (Canada), Ogun (Turkey), ZENN Diva (Turkey), Özlem Ildilsu (Turkey), Ozgen (Turkey), Umut Oryantal (Turkey) and Asli Kaynak (Turkey).

Selina - The Artist

Selina has worked as the primary dancer at the three largest 5-star hotels in Marmaris: Turban Palace, Marmaris Palace and Marti. It was an exciting time in her life; she was chauffeured to her performances and danced in large amphitheaters capable of seating more than 600 people. Each show she worked in featured award winning choreographers and dancers involved in international ballet and folk dance. Each performance required a complex lighting and sound team of professionals. It was an amazing opportunity for her to work with, and learn from, seasoned professionals.

Selina also has extensive experience in more intimate venues. She has been employed as a principal dancer at many restaurants including; Pasha, Edelweiss, Bodoni, Sultan Palace and Ankara in Sweden and Alanya, Ankara and Istanbul in Denmark. She also has stage and group experience through her work as lead dancer in group shows such as "Passion of Orient" and "Turkish Delights."

Thanks Ozma this is so nice of you and ur english is really good. Im very thankful!

Selina is also a versatile soloist. She’s performed at magdansfestivaler abroad and has been featured in several music videos in the United States and Afghanistan. She’s danced at countless weddings, engagement parties, company parties, fairs, festivals, oriental nightclubs, christenings, private parties, bayramfester, New Year's celebrations, inaugurations and galas.

(OK, the next section I didn’t quite understand, so I am guessing)

Her dance style is rooted in Turkish kabarestilen, a style marked by complex movements, floorwork, and expressive hand and arm gestures. In addition to this base style she is well versed in elegant Egyptian styles, aspects of Persian, Iraqi and Lebanese dance, ballet, and folk dances. She is a consummate professional who constantly strives to improve and expand her shows and her repertoire. She is always impressively costumed in the latest high-end dance fashions from design houses in Egypt and Turkey, such as Bella, Sim Moda, Hoda Zaki and Madame Abla.

Selina the instructor
Selina has taught regularly at Lady Fitness Center, Study Vuxenskolan, Malmö Hospital, Oriental Dance Center, Forum, Dansöz, Ataturk and Salsa Sabrosa.

Selina’s students describe her as inspirational, enjoyable and humble. She feels that every student has the potential to enjoy dancing. She shares her knowledge of oriental dance and its history while giving her students the tools they’ll need to become dancers who can express themselves as individuals. Lessons with her explore dance technique, expression, stage presence, tips and tricks, dance history and laughter.

(Is “dansföreningen” a word the translation program forgot to translate? Does it mean dance studio? )

In 2007, Selina and Soraya felt there was a need to better promote and educate people in Turkish styles of dance and thus founded the Turkish dansföreningen Dansöz. Currently, Dansöz has over 300 members and has been instrumental in bringing more people to this unique dance.

(some of this I didn’t understand and made guesses in)

Through her work with Dansöz, Selina has held workshops at city hall, hospitals, universities, associations and dozens of schools in Malmö. She also runs annual dance trips to Turkey where students can increase their knowledge of bellydance, folk dances, and Turkish customs.

(Is “mångkulturalite” a word the program forgot to translate?)

Selina has also used her dance skills to help support nonprofit organizations that protect children, the disabled and mångkulturalitet as the Red Cross and BRIS. She’s donated her expertise by teaching volunteers at events around Sweden that have been highlighted on television and in newspapers. In addition to helping other organizations, Selina has also created a charity project in which she uses the money raised by her performances to help orphans in Turkey.